专栏 : 岸莫笑【原创】

莫笑 2018-02-16 17:53 收藏

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a Coast You are the furthest - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 17:53)

b You are the forefront of the wave. You are the outer circle of the lake. - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 17:55)

c What is so special about outer circle of the lake - Thanks. [0] (2018-02-16 18:16)

d 是对应诗歌原文的“外圈“ - 湖的外圈就是湖岸 [0] (2018-02-16 19:54)

b You are the nest of birds - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 17:58)

b You enjoy the assonant vibration of the creek. - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:07)

b You observe the changing face of the sea. - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:10)

b You appreciate the sobriety of the lake. - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:13)

b You provide human beings with habitats generation by generation. - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:23)

b I would rather fly high above the sky from coast to coast if I could be a bird. - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:29)

b I would hover over, watching you again and again. - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:35)

a 莫笑的这首原创诗《岸》，短小简洁，却想象丰富，意像鲜明，动 - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:46)

a 笔者以水衬托岸，恰到好处。“河流”，“海涛”，“湖波”都是水 - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 18:58)

b 想起班芙露易丝湖的波光潋滟。转向第二段，笔者由静态陈述转为动态描绘，从视觉观察转向视觉和听觉的共同使用上，“喧” 作用与耳，“观”作用与眼，“赏”作用与脑（通常也指“心”）。 - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 19:08)

c 纠正：改“与”为“于”，共三处。 - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 19:42)

b 第三段，笔者让想象力自由驰骋，幻想自己是一只在高空盘旋的苍鹰，俯瞰广袤的北美大地，秀丽河山尽收眼底。这不禁让我想起O Canada!里的歌词： - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 19:20)

b O Canada! Our home and native land! True patriot love in all of us command. With glowing hearts we s - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 19:25)

c in all thy sons command - Dont change it [0] (2018-02-16 21:05)

d Would you prefer the previous version? - unhappy women [0] (2018-02-16 21:27)

b From far and wide, we stand on guard for thee. God keep our land glorious and free! O Canada! We sta - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 19:29)

b 最后，我想说，笔者配图得当，切合诗歌的主题，起到画龙点睛的作用。 - Brown Beaver [0] (2018-02-16 19:32)

a 带着你的诗情，回到生活，感到更有图意了。希望你继续放歌这 - 游客 [0] (2018-02-19 10:27)

a 有气势，有诗情。写出了温哥华的图意。 - 游客 [0] (2018-02-19 11:07)

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专栏 : 岸 莫笑 【原创】